Bones’ writing prompts for today’s 3 Word Wednesday are “Deny~Smile~Uncomfortable”.
This one came easily to me today since I had been mulling some thoughts in my mind the last couple of days and the prompts fit in nicely. Thanks, Bone.
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some days
some days i’m happy and
i don’t give a fuck and
it’s easy to deny
some days i’m bitchy and
i ooz venom and
i’m uncomfortable in my
bones, in my skin, in my rage
some days i’m dreamy and peaceful
then i see you in my mind the way
it used to be and
i smile
and no matter how unconcerned
i feel on the happy days
or how venomous i feel on the bitchy days, i still
end up wanting when i think of you
on the peaceful days
whypaisley said,
June 5, 2008 at 7:17 am
very intimate and true.. i see myself in that last line too closely for comfort….
Linda Jacobs said,
June 5, 2008 at 7:35 am
Oh, my God, this is so true! I like the rawness here!
TC said,
June 5, 2008 at 7:46 am
That was sweet and sad at the same time. I think most of us – or at least me – can relate to this a great deal.
gautami tripathy said,
June 5, 2008 at 9:54 am
Complexity is keyword. All of us are that way..
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Tammy said,
June 5, 2008 at 9:20 pm
That last stanza IS me. Nice job!
mariacristina said,
June 6, 2008 at 2:06 am
You detail the ups and downs and the changing screen of emtions. The narrator takes a philosophical tone, accepting the quickly changing emotional landscape. Who couldn’t relate to this humanity?
pieceofpie said,
June 7, 2008 at 4:15 am
yes, that is exactly how love gone bad and he’s gone works..
Amarettogirl said,
June 7, 2008 at 11:25 am
mmmm…this poem had a rawness of emotion in it that I really enjoyed and appreciated! Excellent thoughts and sculpted poem!
Here is my 3ww:
http://amarettogirl.squarespace.com/the-written-word/
nathan1313 said,
June 11, 2008 at 6:01 pm
It’s impossible not to keep reading after that great first stanza.